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Day 4: microfiction for a longer scene.

This is a last-minute entry, folks. Today has been a busy day, details aside, and now had been the first time I have had available to really sit down and think and write. The result is what follows: an outline of sorts for a bigger scene in mind, but for the time being it will work all right as a piece of microfiction. Kept to two hundred words or fewer.


Adrian had been nursing a whiskey sour for half an hour. It wasnt very good but he couldnt decide if it was because of the liquor’s poor quality or the amount of it. Standing two seats down the lathed maple bar was Georgie, his mouth close to the ear of a pretty brunette and her laughing at what salacious thing had been whispered.

I was tellin her something about you, Ade.

Were you.

Yessir, Georgie said. That—now you can believe this or you can dismiss it—that you have a dick.

That I have a dick.

Attached and functional the rumor has it.

The brunette plucked the olive by its toothpick from her third martini glass, its slick contents sloshing at the clumsy touch of her hand.

Is it true, Adrian? she asked. Her breath was stale. Do you have a dick?

She put her head on his shoulder, her lissome, awkward body bridging the gap between stools. He dragged hard on the thin straw in his glass, felt a sick warmth bloom in his chest.

Answer the girl, Georgie said.

She looked up to his eyes, mouth grinning, mouth saying Do you want to use it?


Though my output here thus far hasnt been prodigious, I dont worry. The fact that words are coming regularly, difficult or not, is reassuring, and details for ideas have blossomed in mind, for both my carnival story and the modernly-set one as suggested by my writing professor. Besides, as Hemingway said, The first draft of anything is shit. I have wiggle-room.

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  1. 5 January 2011 at 11:34 am

    I think that’s the thing to take from this. Rather than focus on what we’re creating, we should focus on the fact we are creating. We can get stuff done on a regular basis. You’re right, editing and changing will be needed. But it’s encouraging to get something down every day. Keep at it.

  2. Dan
    5 January 2011 at 3:15 pm

    Agreed with the both of you. Also, this read so much like The Sun Also Rises for me. Just the fast pace smooth read and all out minimalism. Keep getting them words out, sir.

    • ad.
      5 January 2011 at 6:39 pm

      Thanks, Dan — these characters, in their brief glimpse, are actually part of a long story idea I have that I’d like to make into a modern version of The Sun Also Rises, without the expatriates but with collegiate young folks and a similar laissez faire lifestyle.

      • Dan
        5 January 2011 at 7:34 pm

        I’d love to read it.

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